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Lesson 4:


Today you are going to complete your independent extended write and then once you have finished I would like you to edit and improve it. This will be the final scenes of Macbeth, scenes 6, 7 and 8.


If you have the final scenes to watch I suggest again that you re-watch each scene and write down the key events in each, so that you have an extra mini plan on what you are going to write. This will be similar to what we did on Tuesdays lesson. Once you have a plan of you scene you can start to write it in the narrative form. Please remember to use a variety of punctuation (ellipsis, brackets, semi-colons etc) and include interesting vocabulary (banquet, crevice, sullen etc) and grammatical forms (fronted adverbials, relative clauses, short sentences etc) also include lots of description and if any speech make sure you explain the actions too.


Once you have completed you writing please can you re-read it altogether. You will need to check whilst your reading for any spelling mistakes or missing punctuation, you will also need to make sure that each paragraph flows into the next - that it makes sense from one to the next.


After reading it through and checking the basics of making sense, I would like you to go back over it and improve it. This could be adding more description to a noun phrase or more description to an event or speech. Think about your word choices also, so up level your words to more precise nouns/phrases or interesting vocabulary. For example, instead of sword I could write the long, sliver bladed weapon. Or ghost it could become manifestation of Banquo which is haunting Macbeth.


This is going to be an assessment piece of writing so when you hand in your lockdown books next week I will be able to mark it properly. As it is an assessment piece can you also be aware of you presentation, it will need to be in a blue/black pen and set out like we do in class.


Below I have put the links to the BBC Macbeth videos and also the examples of the story if you are stuck for any ideas.

Editing Instructions: 


1. Each sentence starts with a capital letter.

2. Capitalize the pronoun 'I'.

3. Capital letter for every proper noun.

4. If a sentence starts with a fronted adverbial there needs to be a comma after it.

5. Correctly punctuate speech with speech marks, commas, full stops or different punctuation.

6> With speech remember to say who 'said' it and include some actions for that character.

7. Improve your nouns by making them more precise - a table becomes an ebony black coffee table.

8. Improve your vocabulary - the lunch hall becomes the banquet hall.

9. Make sure we have a variety of fronted adverbials - time, place, frequency, manner and possibility.

10. Include a range of sentence types, like relative clauses - the king, who was wearing a golden crown, was sitting on the throne.